Monday, 31 January 2011

The Lovers

Monday 31st January 2011, A. Palmer

Look at the lovers:
They leave together but neither leads.
I ponder their destination,
as they course through Paris back streets
in a thick-set Saturday fog.

I watch as he makes her giggle;
he looks pleased with himself,
taking it as invitation to nuzzle her neck.
She loves this, and I know this
by the way she lets a lip escape beneath her teeth.

They’re doing much more than just surviving,
they’re making a dying man feel alive.
I can’t decide if that’s beautiful or tragic,
suspecting I’ll settle on the latter later,
for self-pity’s sake perhaps.

For now, I try to deduce from the way he hangs off her shoulder,
or the way she tucks his hand to her breast,
whether they will go home to hot air balloon rides,
stroking children to sleep
and kissing cups of cocoa cold,

or wine-stained mouths
frothing across perspiring flesh,
as candles roll knocked from waxed saucers
atop a table from yesteryear.
Which is the more romantic vision?

I wrestle with the pictures until
I find my answer blanketed in fog-
ahead, he bends to tie her lace
and she sows a kiss somewhere
in Thursday’s hair.

11 comments:

  1. "...sows a kiss somewhere in Thursday’s hair." is brilliant.

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  2. Thank you so much Tess, what a wonderful comment. By the way, I linked your blog from here, as it's a place full of stunning work. Keep it up :)

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  3. Beautiful write! Love the last line too...

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  4. Why thank you Louise! Thank you for stopping by and taking the time to read.

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  5. "They’re doing much more than just surviving,
    they’re making a dying man feel alive."

    Your poem is filled with clear projections, as well as leading questions that bring the initial observations to life. Excellent poetry.

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  6. you nailed this one...beautiful, somewhat playful imagery at times...nice one shot

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  7. I wrote something about this same topic on my blog, only considerably less artfully than your very beautiful post. Watching others in love and figuring them out, all the while sitting in your hard seat. Very nice, I liked it a lot.

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  8. agree, agree, and agree with the above...excellent, descriptive work with a brillant ending...bkm

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  9. Had no clue where your poem was headed but a great ending. A beautiful poem as usual. Thank you for sharing.

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  10. oh arron - i like this so much - wonderful write with lots of beautiful, beautiful lines - but the line i just LOVE is...kissing cups of cocoa cold..

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  11. Romantic, truly poetic, excellent.

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