Tuesday, 19 October 2010

Cometment

Monday 18th October 2010, A. Palmer


The moon blinked, and missed a comet flash across the velvet fill.
We did not and watched its solitary mission from atop a hill
Whilst the heath slept soundly beneath our gaze.
Without warning, courage hitched upon the back of blue trail blaze
And taking my chance without a breath:

      I did ask her to marry me.

Thoughts soon thinked before that comet is seen around these parts-
Not least before the beating ceases within our own hearts.
But as flesh does flake, our everlasting love does soar
Like the comet we watched, as it returns once more
Following a thousand years without a breath:
   

      Another does ask his to marry he. 




11 comments:

  1. thank goodness love is not as rare as that comet...i remember the nervousness of asking my wife to marry me...nice one shot

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  2. Wonderful writing and truly beautiful the "comet" impressions as beneath a starry sky and all the emotions/ "engaging"....lovely! ~April :)

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  3. Very nicely written. I like the image of the moments shared, and missed, as the comet streaks by.

    I'd love to hear what you think of my poem, but I am afraid it is more dark (and comic): http://bit.ly/cxQRgx

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  4. Interesting scene - a rare moment captured.

    Nice One Shot!

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  5. cometement - really cool capture of a special moment..

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  6. having watched a once in a lifetime astrological event "atop a hill", I really appreciated your write. (Although yours was way more romantic...with marriage proposals and all). Beautifully penned from start to finish.

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  7. This is very beautiful... liked it so much specially since I love the moon and the night around it....



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  8. You capture great sentiment through the images of stars and well crafted lines. Cheers

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  9. Ha - no matter how many 100s of years I'm sure the scene would be just as spectacular

    What a great One Shot
    wanted to stop by and thank you for stopping by One Shot this week. It is because of poets like you that we have such inspiring words to read. Please feel welcome any Wednesday

    Moon Smiles for the One Stop Team

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  10. Clever title, good theme/work.

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